[The Father, the Son, and the Holy Spirit, existing before time has begun.]
THE FATHER: Let us make creation!
THE SON: Yes, Father, let us.
[Holy Spirit glides about in agreement]
THE FATHER: In this order we shall make creation: the earth, the heavens, the vegetation, the sun and moon, the fish and birds, and the beasts and man.
THE SON: It will be good, Father, but after doing all that we should rest.
THE FATHER: Yes, after we finish with creation, we shall rest.
[The Trinity finishes with creation, all except for the creation of man.]
THE FATHER: How should we make man? Surely man will be the greatest of our creations, so we must take care in how we craft man.
THE SON: Yes, we should make him in our own image, therefore man will resemble us and he will be given dominion over earth because of his likeness to us.
[Holy Spirit glides around vigorously]
THE FATHER: You're right Holy Spirit, we shall also provide man with a soul, that man may be guided and will always have a link to us. Also, we will give man free will, so that man's actions will be his own.
[The Trinity continued their creation and brought man to life]
ADAM [gasping for air as he takes his first breaths]: Lord!
THE FATHER: I am here. Be calm!
[Adam tries to calm himself and then notices a strange and unfamiliar feeling in his stomach]
ADAM [clutching his stomach]: Lord! Help me! There is something wrong with my stomach, I'm dying!
[The Trinity exchange knowing glances]
THE FATHER: Adam, did I not say to be calm? You are not dying, you are just hungry.
[The Trinity calls forth the angels and tells them to bring food for Adam]
ADAM: Thank you Lord! Come and eat with me, for none of this would be possible without you!
THE FATHER: I will sit with you, for we have much to talk about.
[The Father, over the course of the meal, tells Adam about all creation and warns him about eating from the tree of knowledge of good and evil]
ADAM [now having wisdom from talking with God]: There is so much to do! We must prepare the land for my descendants, name the animals, and I only have so much time before I return to the dust!
THE FATHER: Be calm, Adam. I will have the angels help you in your work and I will also provide for you a helpmate so that you will never be alone.
[The Father creates Eve from Adam, and upon hearing that they must help Adam, the angels are taken aback, especially Satan, the most beautiful of all the angels.]
SATAN [crying out in heaven]:Father! Father!
THE FATHER [confused]: Yes, my son? What is the matter?
SATAN: I will not help Adam in his work! He is beneath me! He is beneath all the angels!
THE SON [becoming angry at Satan's disobedience]: Satan! You will do as our Father commands!
SATAN [enraged and tightly grasping the hilt of his sword]: I will not! I would rather be cast from heaven than serve the Dust!
[Satan draws his sword lightning fast and attempts to strike at the Son, but is blocked by Michael, the archangel].
MICHAEL [terrified by the sight of his enraged brother]: Satan, you fool! You would dare draw your sword against the Son?!
SATAN: They do not love us, brother! Come, together we can overthrow them and be rid of any who might seek to make us their servants!
[Satan and Michael exchange a series of blows while the rest of the angels watch in anticipation.]
SATAN: See how your so-called Father watches and does not intervene to help you? He does not care about you Michael!
[The angels stir uneasily]
MICHAEL [feeling slightly uneasy himself]: No...! That's not true! You are a deceiver!
[Meanwhile, Adam and Eve watch as the heavens tremble above them.]
EVE [trembling]: Adam! Our Lord is upset with us, we must find somewhere to hide!
ADAM [confused and scared]: Surely not, for we have not done anything against our Lord! We should wait here for him to visit with us!
[At this moment, the Serpent walks up to Adam and Eve with evil intentions in his heart, because he is jealous of the creation of man.]
THE SERPENT: Come with me, you two! I know of a place where you can hide and be safe!
[The heavens explode in a great flash]
ADAM & EVE: Ok, Serpent, we will follow you to this place!
[back in heaven]
SATAN: How can you not see the truth, Michael? Our Father favors man above us, that's why we are ordered to work under him!
[1/3 of all angels agree and join Satan.]
FALLEN ANGELS: It's true! Satan is telling the truth! We will fight with you, Satan!
MICHAEL [feeling greatly troubled, rallies the remaining angels to himself]: Brothers! We must cast Satan and his fallen angels out of heaven!
ANGELS: Oorah!
[After a long and terrible battle, Satan and his fallen angels were cast out of heaven, but not before killing the majority of the remaining angels.]
[Back on Earth.]
THE SERPENT: Quick, you two! Eat this fruit from the tree of protection and you will not surely die!
[Adam and Eve quickly eat the fruit and immediately realize their mistake.]
ADAM [in utter disbelief]: What have we done? Now, the Lord will surely strike us down for our sin...
THE FATHER: Adam, Eve? Where art thou?
EVE [trembling]: Adam, we must go to him and blame our sin on the Serpent, for he was the one who deceived us.
ADAM: Yes, our Lord will understand.
EVE: Lord! We are here! We have eaten of the tree of knowledge, but it was the Serpent who deceived us into doing it!
THE FATHER [with a heavy heart]: Because you have done this, you will be cast out into the world, forced to do spiritual battle with Satan and his fallen angels all the days of your life. Serpent, your arms and legs will taken from you, and you will crawl on your belly and eat dust all the days of your life. And because of what Satan has done in heaven, my angels are few in number, therefore, you will have little help in your worldly tasks. You will work by the sweat of your brow all the days of your life.
Author's Note: I got my ideas to write this story from both the creation story in the Bible and from the apocrypha's that are written by Louis Ginzberg. The main details that I changed of the angels fighting, the Serpent leading Adam and Eve to the tree of knowledge because of the battle that was going on in heaven, and the dialogue that the Trinity had, mostly the Father and the Son. I've always been interested in how things might sound if you could hear the dialogue that went on in those early days. This story is my take on some of the things that might have been said.
Bibliography: This is based on the creation story as told in the Bible and by Louis Ginzberg in his "The Legends of the Jews."
Image: Angels doing battle, Wikimedia Commons
John,
ReplyDeleteI like how creative you were with the story of Adam and Eve! I as well read the story of Adam and Eve, and thought you transformed the story very well. I like how you included dialogue. It would have been interesting to know what they were actually thinking and saying to each other in the Garden of Eden. Great story!
John,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story about the creation of man. The dialogue between the Father and the Son really allowed for me to understand what the reasoning behind everything was. I thought the ending was very good also because it made Adam and Eve demonstrate great remorse for what they had done. I did not read this story, however, I may actually next week after reading your story about Adam and Eve. Overall, great story! Enjoyed reading it.
-Trevor-
Hey John, my favorite part of your story was the dialogue. I was intrigued by how you would explain the reasoning behind every character's actions. It was fitting to see how Satan tries to influence the other angels through jealousy I've never read this story either and I'm contemplating reading it next week too now that I've read your rendition of it. I thought the story flowed well and was organized to make good sense. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi John,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really good job with this story! The fact that you included dialogue gives it a unique spin and also gives the reader some insights as to what is going on inside the characters’ heads. I especially appreciated this at the end of the story, because I showed that Adam and Eve felt regretful for their actions.